I've been waiting for this story ^^ *huggleglomp*

I thought it was interesting that the readers are kept in suspense about the nature of Ajibane's work until we see it (ahem) 'first hand'. ^^ It's very cleverly written, and a whole lot of fun. Kudos!

I giggled for joy when Seishirou appeared to rescue his Subaru-kun. It felt just like the first OVA where he kind of just... fades into the picture and you're overwhelmed with the cool, badass power that is Seishirou. Eee, I love it.

"...cradeled him almost tenderly." XD XD XD *huggles*

And I liked the tie to X's Chi no Ryuu. ^^

Let's see... as far as constructive criticism goes, I would have loved to see slightly more detail in the latter half. But that might have also slowed down the flow of the story... so it's really your call. Things like how Ajibane died/slumped/fell hitting a misplaced chair or if his brow fell when he accused Seishirou of being abnormal or how shock brought a little more white to his eyes... *giggles* I'm getting carried away! But it started to feel a little dry toward the end there.

All in all, fantastic story. *tacklehuggle* :3 More blood-besmeared Subaru! *fangirl cackle*

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